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I don't know how to approach this as a review... but here goes... graphic wise your work is distinctly average but it kinda works, though does gget confusing at times... The lowfi style is helped perhaps by the voiceover sound effects, though often these are too weak to be of any use, but nice try anyway.
Story/plot wise, I can only say one thing... you're insane! where did all that come from!? um.. yeah, in all I gave you an average score as I really dont know how to rate this piece!